Your About page is the second page almost every buyer visits. Most agents waste it.
Here is the typical version. A headshot. A list of awards. Years in the business. Sales volume. A line about being "passionate about helping clients achieve their real estate goals." It reads like a resume, and nobody hires an agent because of a resume.
The buyer reading it has one quiet question: can this person help someone like me, in my situation, on my street. Your awards do not answer that. Worse, they sound the same as every other agent's awards, so the page that was supposed to set you apart makes you blend in.
What buyers are actually asking
Before someone reaches out, they are silently checking three things. A good About page answers all three in the first few lines.
- Can you help someone like me? First-time buyer, downsizer, investor, relocating family. They want to see themselves.
- Do you actually know my area? Not "serving the greater metro region." The specific places they are looking.
- Can I trust you? Proof you have done this, told in a way that feels like a person, not a billboard.
The fix, in four moves
1. Open with who you help and where
Lead with the buyer and the place, not your title. "I help first-time buyers find their footing in the East Bay" tells the right person they are in the right place. "Top 1% producer since 2015" tells them nothing they can use.
2. Show you know the market, not just that you sell in it
Anyone can say they work an area. Prove you know it. Name the neighborhoods, the trade-offs, the kind of buyer each one suits. Two specific sentences about Maple Heights beat two paragraphs of adjectives about your service.
3. Prove it with one real story or number
Pick one. A client you helped win a multiple-offer situation. A listing you priced right when others said go higher. One concrete proof point lands harder than a wall of stats, because it is a story a reader can picture.
4. Make the next step obvious
End every About page with one clear action. "Tell me what you are looking for" with a short form, or a calendar link. The page that builds trust and then asks for nothing is a handshake with no follow-up.
Nobody hires an agent because of a resume. They hire the one who clearly understands their street.
Before and after
"A consistent top producer, Jordan brings energy, integrity, and a client-first approach to every transaction across the greater metro area."
"I help first-time buyers in Fremont and Newark buy without overpaying or getting outbid. I grew up here, I know which streets hold value, and I have walked clients through 40-plus closings in these exact neighborhoods. Tell me what you are looking for and I will tell you, honestly, whether now is your moment."
Same agent. One version disappears into the crowd. The other sounds like the person you would actually call.
Your About page is not a formality. It is the page where a curious visitor decides whether to become a lead. Spend an hour rewriting it around the buyer instead of your credentials, and it quietly starts earning the listings your resume never could.
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